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I stood there staring down the barrel of the gun I knew all too well. How many times had I seen it used recently and wondered when it would be turned on me? I couldn’t move, though. Maybe that made me stupid but I trusted him. Would he really kill me after everything? Not knowing drove me insane. It wasn’t a surprise though, I never could see his future and since I began traveling with him I could no longer see my own. There was a point in my life where I would have hated that… but now I trusted him. He had saved my life more than once, so why would he end it now?

Click.

The safety was off. He was serious about this. I looked over the barrel at his mismatched eyes. His right was an aqua blue but his left was gunmetal gray. The pupil was just a prick of black in the middle compared to the right which was dilated in the semi-darkness. He was focused. I knew he was calculating his shot perfectly, ignoring the stray hair that had fallen into his face. Why hadn’t he pulled the trigger yet? We’d been standing here for a while, both of us breathing hard and sweating from the chase. I shivered with fear and anticipation. Was he giving me a chance to escape? He never let a target get away, that wasn’t like Dante. I wasn’t going to run anyway. If it had to end then let it be by his hand. He had to know. “I’m not going to run. I won’t –“

BANG!!

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So I got some inspiration from an upcoming movie I saw previews for but I'm sure the plot's not the same. Anyway, I guess I just haven't written anything in a while and I felt I needed to since I have some free time and pent up energy. This is just the preface to see a reaction sort of. I'm in the process of writing the first chapter. I always think action is so much better so I'm bored of the first chapter. LOL! I'll get to the good stuff eventually. This is a look at what's to come though. Yay me for leaving you in the dark and cutting you off at a cliff hanger. I love doing that :D

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:iconprincessofpink1212:
This is intense. Definitely makes me want to read more.

It reminds me of the beginning of a Twiight book, style-wise, in that it's a scene from the middle of a story used as a sort of teaser to draw you in. Well done! :)

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"Wit beyond measure is man's greatest treasure."
:iconworldsfire:
I always thought that was the most interesting way to hook a reader. Thank you.

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Being away at school is like living in a tiny microcosm of humanity that exists in the impossible realm of kids with no parents and no homes; a concentrated cell of unreality that is supposed to give birth to adequately functioning members of society.
:iconaltosephy:
I really like this Jo! Are you really going to write more? I'm so excited!

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Oooo thank you. Yes, as soon as I get some time I will finish the first chapter. Sadly I have two/three papers due this week so it's on hold. I'm not happy but I need the grades on these papers so it's everything to the side but the papers.

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Being away at school is like living in a tiny microcosm of humanity that exists in the impossible realm of kids with no parents and no homes; a concentrated cell of unreality that is supposed to give birth to adequately functioning members of society.
:iconprincessofpink1212:
Welcome! :)

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"Wit beyond measure is man's greatest treasure."

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